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Our Love

Once sweet, soft, and nice

But now frozen like a block of ice

Now forever lost in time

My broken heart

Your darkest crime

My life torn apart

My broken shattered heart

Our long forgotten love

Now gone like a slaughtered dove

Thinking of the last time you held my hand

Wondering why I didn’t understand

Back then…

Realizing now it was just a stupid game

That you always love to play

To you every girl was the same

Now knowing why you gave my love away

Reading now the love letter you sent

Knowing I never meant…

Anything to you

And every word was never true

Only wish I could have seen

That we were never meant to be

And now I know I can get past

But I feel that I won’t last

Flashbacks of our long forgotten love

Remembering when you gave it a little shove

The memory of the last time you held my hand

Remembering I didn’t understand

You wanting our love to stay

Even though you push it all away

A long time ago…

The memory of you

I should have known

We never would have made it through

it was about 3:00am when i made this to me my poetry is a story...
and in this story a girl in love witnessed her lover cheating thinking her life is over her life a mess he left scars on her heart she realizes he was never into her that he was just playing her she goes through breakup he wants her back but she ignores him because she knows he wont ever change
its just a poem a breakup poem i don't feel this way but I'm sure most of us been there
i would really appreciate your feedback if its good if its horrible any mistakes like misspelling that kind of thing

hope you like it :D
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FaineSpades Jul 18, 2013  Student General Artist
That's awesome!
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thanks so much :) I'm glad you like it
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FaineSpades Jul 18, 2013  Student General Artist
I can really relate to it especialy during the last few months. I love it grerat job.
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:iconrockyroxas13:
yeah i felt that way about a year ago...
you think so? i haven't done poetry in so long
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FaineSpades Jul 18, 2013  Student General Artist
-nods- Its a painfull feeling for anyone to go through especialy when you love that person. Yes I do think you did very well capturing the mood and seting in your words.
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:iconrockyroxas13:
at least it goes away over time...although somewhere deep inside i don't think it does
thanks sooo much!!!:D:D:)
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FaineSpades Jul 18, 2013  Student General Artist
Indeed. Your welcome!
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